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Freezing finely under fleece
Knees a knocking can’t keep peace
Exhaustion cumbers; existence expelled
Soulless with sorrows, sadly with self
Taking out timbers, toasting one’s toes
Heating a hotplate illegally in hose.
Midnight mutters milkily to meek minds
Stealing the stealthy with sweet silky rhymes.
©2008-2009 =Emmie-Lynne
:iconemmie-lynne:

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title? don't ask... I really don't know

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:iconsilica-streak:
Oh my, the alliteration in this poem is wonderfully written and not at all overused. I love it!
:iconemmie-lynne:
thanks a lot :D what do you think of the title?

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
:iconpeacefulsoul:
Not bad. The ryhme scheme kept going smoothly. Great work as always!

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"Hell belongs in a book
Where the setting is doused with flowers
Upon a field, accompanied by butterflies,
As some random man screams,
“Today’s weather is 50 degrees
With a 101% chance of cloudy skies,
Just to irk the Hell out of it!" -SIRyan-
:iconemmie-lynne:
eh, I'm not impressed by it, it has no real value no depth... thanks anyways :D

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
:iconsilica-streak:
I don't understand the title, so if you'd like to explain it to me, I'm here :D.
:iconemmie-lynne:
IDK, maybe its just a random Onomatopoeia I came up with, lol :) I had to make sure it wasn't in any dictionaries though... didn't want it to have some sorta bad meaning, haha

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
:iconpeacefulsoul:
I understand it and just the second line is a painted picture, this is awesome. Maybe you meant Freezma though? Reminds me of a man shaking in his boots. This is great.

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"Hell belongs in a book
Where the setting is doused with flowers
Upon a field, accompanied by butterflies,
As some random man screams,
“Today’s weather is 50 degrees
With a 101% chance of cloudy skies,
Just to irk the Hell out of it!" -SIRyan-
:iconemmie-lynne:
thanks a lot... I might just change it to Freezma, I like that better :) it makes more sense, lol

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.
:iconemmie-lynne:
I have changed my mind... I like Feezma because living in a dorm is a debt... in MANY ways... thus FEEZ

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Unknown to the world, but deep in the forest... tiptoes delicate, tiny feet the size of bee's knees.

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